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By: Courteney-Jade Gillespie

Comment on Opinion blog: http://bungeemylife.blogspot.com/2008/10/fatfatter-and-first-year-spread.html

Well now where to start…firstly, I do have to apologize but wow, your spelling and grammar in this post! Honest mistakes I am sure, but it completely threw me off and I lost interest and respect when reading it! Back to the main topic at hand. I found this blog mediocre and bland, this topic has been widely spoken about, and scrutinized to utter precision, so you should have this topic to the extreme, found a slant that no other student has made before. What crash diets are people trying? Why would they have modified our food? Is it all a conspiracy? You made this post to personal, which I think is your first mistake; why not interview your friend? You used Propps technique, that came across, first year spread being the villain, exercise the hero etc, I congratulate you on that, I just believe that your piece lacked a finesse that could have been created with a little more effort.

By: Courteney-Jade Gillespie
from: http://www.fourhensandacock.blogspot.com/

Who new that poetry could define a man with a moustache in such a "musical" way. I read this piece and as your words graced my eyes images and an irritating, yet entertaining tune popped into my head. I enjoy how you have used Propp's form of 'Dramatis personae' in your writing and setting Garth as the hero of the moustache men. You have included the fundamental components of narrative, such as a constant stable piece of writing whereby each idea develops logically from the previous one. You have also included the Todorov status of the equilibrium. I really enjoyed this piece. Thank you.